‘Final’ Draft
Here is the final draft of the first profile story I ever wrote:
Editorial Reflection
Overall I enjoyed this round of workshops, and it was interesting to compare the feature and profile feedback. The feature feedback was tentative initially, but eventually, the class became comfortable with critiques. However, the comments on the profiles were well-developed and delivered with more confidence. One informative and fun moment was when we edited Madi’s piece. Madi needed help cutting her article down, so the class discussed what to remove from an article over word count. We talked about eliminating…
Workshop Experience
After having my profile workshopped, I feel I have a better understanding of what to do going forward. My first step will be to conduct and add in a second interview with someone who knows Gennaco. Hopefully, this interview will provide more perspective and help flesh out my piece. I will also need to either break up some of the quotes or simply remove parts of the quotes. This will reduce some of the wordiness of my piece and make…
Profile Pitches
Professor Thomas Klak- Professor Klak is a passionate environmentalist. Focused on forestry and plants, Prof. Klak has a personal connection to the native plant species in New England. He assisted a group of students in planting a butterfly garden on campus to help the monarch population. Along with the garden, Klak also enjoys raising flocks of monarchs in his kitchen annually. Prof. Klak’s professional work is specialized towards the restoration of the American Chestnut tree. Currently Prof. Klak is working with…
Feature Reflection
Overall, I feel I have learned a lot from this project. I was incredibly nervous for the interview and I may have overprepared. The interview itself was awkward and felt very staged. Later on during this project, the class learned how to properly conduct an interview. As such, I was able to look back and really learn from my mistakes. What made my interview even more of a challenge, was when I went to save the audio and my phone…
Editorial Reflection
After five rounds of the workshops, I have learned a lot about the right and wrong ways to write an article. For example, I learned that the appropriate paragraph length for feature articles is smaller than in other writing media. The smaller paragraphs make the piece easier to read (and write!). I also learned how to make comments and critiques as well. I was tentative to make comments at first because I didn’t really know how to explain my critiques….
Pitches
10 Places you have to visit before you graduate As the semester begins, students are looking for places to go. I would like to write a piece about some of the local places students can visit. It is important for students to feel connected and comfortable in their local environment, and hopefully, this roadmap piece will do just that. Native and Perennial Many students choose UNE for its beautiful campus. The landscaping and gardening work done on campus is part…
Jamison Vs. Okonofua et al.
Scientific research provides the reader concrete evidence whereas observational research provides evidence in an analogous way. The use of concrete evidence is helpful for readers as it demonstrates the truth and facts behind what is otherwise an assumption. Yet, the observational research that Jamison conducts allows readers to connect to the issues emotionally. This emotional connection allows the research to interact with a wider audience. To make this observational research have the same factual effect of scientific research, Jamison uses…
Morgellons “disease or delusion”
I do not feel I have read enough about Morgellons disease to make a qualified judgment of “disease of delusion.” In fact, even the medical community is unsure of their official verdict regarding Morgellons. That being said, I have read “Devil’s Bait” by Leslie Jamison which entertains Morgellons as both “disease and delusion.” After reading Jamison’s piece, I feel inclined to say that Morgellons is a delusion. The article uses no scientific evidence to back the claim of disease, so…
Jamison and Price (Fake) Dialogue
Jamison: “I tell her I don’t see a scarred woman when I look at her; I think she’s beautiful. She thanks me for saying so, but I can tell the compliment rang a bit hollow. One comment from a stranger can’t reclaim years spent hating the body you live in.” Price: If it makes sense that your empathy would ring hollow, then why would you bother giving the complement at all? If anything it seems to have further alienated her. …
